This is way too gamy, especially for India. Think about it this way, India is probably the number one place where men are looking up "tinder lines", which is why it is more important than anywhere else for you to be original and "normal". If you want to stand out from your large competition. ( India has a shit load of lonely horny men ). Also, I would avoid any references to marriage where arraigned marriage is still the norm. And sarcasm as well. At least until you get to know the girl better and are sure that she is the type who understands sarcasm.

Personally, if I was living in India, I would try to imagine what my competition was doing and avoid that like the plague. If I had to guess, I would venture to say that 99% of them are either... extremely boring ( "hi"" how are you"), extremely needy, way too sexual, or use some form of "pickup lines".

To avoid falling into those 4 camps, you can make your opener some funny/unique/interesting comment or observation about one of her pictures. Then, follow up with some solid banter ( more info on this in my product), build investment from her by subtly DHVing yourself and getting her to qulify. Then smothly close.